Scenario: you are given this opening to a book and must edit it. Please show what you would do if this was a client’s work.
Abner McNamara shrieked when the liquid erupted from the bottle, the cork flying and ink splashing across his shirt and hands and lips. He spat. The ink looked like melted black licorice, but tasted of hell. It began to stain the counter top and snake towards the stacks of paper. His hands scrambled to salvage something before it all became one great, big, black abyss.