A good elevator pitch should not be longer than a short elevator ride of 20 to 30 seconds, hence the name.
Here are some links that will provide helpful tips on creating a good elevator pitch:
https://pacific-alliance.org/wp-content/uploads/2014/04/PADSA-Legislative-Advocacy-101.pdf
https://id.iste.org/docs/pdfs/iste-advocacy-toolkit---elevator-pitch-template.pdf
We have developed an example elevator pitch for you to reference:
Hi, I’m (your name) and I am an advocate with the US Hereditary Angioedema Association and live in (City, State). The HAEA is a patient advocacy organization dedicated to individuals with Hereditary Angioedema, a rare and potentially fatal genetic disease. The Hereditary Angioedema community here in (your state) is facing difficult challenges with the cost of health care that is needed to manage my condition. It is costing my family thousands of dollars out of pocket a month for life saving medication to treat my Hereditary Angioedema. With your support my family and I would benefit from legislation to ease the financial burden we are currently facing.May I set up a meeting with you at your office to discuss this initiative further with you?