The differences between "good" and "bad" writing that we see here have to do with structure: how ideas are organized and presented. Structure is currently (and incredibly) not systematically taught in most schools or universities at the undergrad or grad levels. Yet it is the aspect of writing that is most closely tied to the content of the research and to the logic of a paper's contribution to the literature.
So, in the workshop, we will work on the elements of structure: a central argument for your paper; main points to support that argument at the level of sections, subsections, and paragraphs; details organized to support main points. (We will not work on issues of writing style or English language, which is a separate branch of writing.)
As a final warm-up exercise, take a look at the Introduction of a paper you are working on. Below, please paste a paragraph that you would like to improve, structurally: